I just plowed through the previous four or five chapters to get up to speed and I must say, I deeply, deeply underestimated the depth of your plot when I began reading. Not to say that there was ever a moment when SimTopi was not enjoyable, but I admit that when I began, my attitude was very much "this is a cute tale that won't force me to exercise my brain too much" and I humbly admit that I was very wrong. Thankfully, in all of the right ways.
With every chapter, I'm increasingly impressed with how complex and interwoven your plots lines are. My only criticism is that I occasionally feel that the plot might be running away. You usually haul it in and tie the loose ends before it becomes detrimental to the story, but more than once I've felt the story teetering on the edge of becoming too convoluted.
That said, I have immense respect for your moments of dialogue. Your conversations are usually very well played, but I especially enjoy your one-on-one moments such as Jasmine/Adrian and Gabriel/Rowan from the previous chapters. They have a very believable depth and charm and are some of the most expressive scenes for your characters.
And of course, your pictures are always amazing. I've noticed that more and more you're incorporating more detailed text into the story, but even without, your pictures have the ability to "carry" the story.
Last, but not least, I applaud you on your handling of the relationship between Jasmine and Adrian. Very well scripted considering how tempting many would find it to toss the two of them together in a heartbeat.
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Date: 2010-10-14 09:36 pm (UTC)I just plowed through the previous four or five chapters to get up to speed and I must say, I deeply, deeply underestimated the depth of your plot when I began reading. Not to say that there was ever a moment when SimTopi was not enjoyable, but I admit that when I began, my attitude was very much "this is a cute tale that won't force me to exercise my brain too much" and I humbly admit that I was very wrong. Thankfully, in all of the right ways.
With every chapter, I'm increasingly impressed with how complex and interwoven your plots lines are. My only criticism is that I occasionally feel that the plot might be running away. You usually haul it in and tie the loose ends before it becomes detrimental to the story, but more than once I've felt the story teetering on the edge of becoming too convoluted.
That said, I have immense respect for your moments of dialogue. Your conversations are usually very well played, but I especially enjoy your one-on-one moments such as Jasmine/Adrian and Gabriel/Rowan from the previous chapters. They have a very believable depth and charm and are some of the most expressive scenes for your characters.
And of course, your pictures are always amazing. I've noticed that more and more you're incorporating more detailed text into the story, but even without, your pictures have the ability to "carry" the story.
Last, but not least, I applaud you on your handling of the relationship between Jasmine and Adrian. Very well scripted considering how tempting many would find it to toss the two of them together in a heartbeat.