ZOMBIE FUN TIMES CHAPTER! This was awesome! I love love love the way you built it from the tension in the first scene, slowly gearing up to the action, so well done, it had me on the edge of my seat right up until the end. Incidentally, I love the way you use slides without text just the right amount. I know I tend to over-narrate and have trouble letting a slide just speak for itself sometimes, so I'm always really impressed by how you put together your narrative visually.
"God, this would be a hundred times easier if you just listen to me."
I could not agree with you more Jasmine. Every time I think that girl can not get any awesomer... True she did have the advantage over Adrian in this one of having past experience dealing with the undead, so I can't really blame him for dealing less well with the crisis, but seriously, just do what the blonde BAMF tells you in situations like these Adrian!
I also liked the quiet tender moments with Gabriel and Willow before the fighting started, although I can't help but get the feeling from that conversation that her not being honest with him earlier is somehow going to come back and bite her in the butt later on when he (I assume inevitably) finds out.
Also not going to lie, I completely flailed over getting to see my evil baby as a murderous Zombie! :D
I appear to be rambling so I shall stop now and just bounce silently until the next part comes out! Completely cannot wait!
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Date: 2010-05-15 02:52 pm (UTC)"God, this would be a hundred times easier if you just listen to me."
I could not agree with you more Jasmine. Every time I think that girl can not get any awesomer... True she did have the advantage over Adrian in this one of having past experience dealing with the undead, so I can't really blame him for dealing less well with the crisis, but seriously, just do what the blonde BAMF tells you in situations like these Adrian!
I also liked the quiet tender moments with Gabriel and Willow before the fighting started, although I can't help but get the feeling from that conversation that her not being honest with him earlier is somehow going to come back and bite her in the butt later on when he (I assume inevitably) finds out.
Also not going to lie, I completely flailed over getting to see my evil baby as a murderous Zombie! :D
I appear to be rambling so I shall stop now and just bounce silently until the next part comes out! Completely cannot wait!