Rowan is awesome at looking out for his lil' sister. Makes me wanna go "awwww" despite the mohawk... or maybe because of it XD
I've been thinking this since the first time we saw him, but Adrian looks so young compared to the rest of the uni kids! I'd think he was still in high school, honestly. Nothing wrong with baby-faces, of course, it's probably what reels in the girls, eh? XD
I feel ya on those transitory chapters, but I didn't feel anything awkward about this chapter either. Then again, since I don't know what happens later, I wouldn't be able to tell what in here is meant to play a role later and what is just filler, yanno? Anyway, your dialogue is so natural and lively that it makes the whole thing flow effortlessly. My two cents :)
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Date: 2009-08-08 12:29 pm (UTC)I've been thinking this since the first time we saw him, but Adrian looks so young compared to the rest of the uni kids! I'd think he was still in high school, honestly. Nothing wrong with baby-faces, of course, it's probably what reels in the girls, eh? XD
I feel ya on those transitory chapters, but I didn't feel anything awkward about this chapter either. Then again, since I don't know what happens later, I wouldn't be able to tell what in here is meant to play a role later and what is just filler, yanno? Anyway, your dialogue is so natural and lively that it makes the whole thing flow effortlessly. My two cents :)
Looking forward to the next chapter!